Body paragraph development

1. My primary changes to my paragraph have been changing transition sentences and commentary to better reflect the thesis and topic sentence. Beforehand many of my sentences would just mention, for example "The way Jack is" without taking the care to mention how Jack is actually an immoral person. I also made sure to edit in more references to the happy ending at the end of the novel, as beforehand the piece focused too much on the bad aspects of his personality which isn't really a problem except that I need to remember to broaden the thoughts to include his rewards at the end of the play.

2. I really need better word choice, as you may have noticed, then "bad person". How else can I state that someone is "bad" in regards to Jack? Other then that, I'm not really having many problems. There won't be any problems transitioning into the paragraph since (I thought) Jack was going first, but it shan't be too difficult.